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Some countries with long average working hours are more economically successful than their countries which do not have a long working time. To what extent do you agree?

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The chart below shows the percentage of
households
 in owned and rented
accommodation
 in England
andWales
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and Wales
 between 1918 and 2011. The bar chart provides information about the proportion of
households
 in owned and rented
accommodation
 in England and Wales during the period from 1918 to 2011. Overall, it is obvious that the percentage of
houses
 which were bought increased, whereas the proportion of
houses
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were
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rented decreased over the whole period.
Moreover
, in 1971, the figures for both items stood at the same number. In 1918, more
households
 renting
accommodation
 than
households
 owning
accommodation
 were chosen, approximately 87% and roughly 23%,respectively.
Although
 renting
houses
 was more popular than buying
houses
 from 1939 to1961,the statistics for both
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 at 50% in 1971.
Furthermore
, the proportion of renting
houses
 was less than the owning
houses
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in 1981,
for
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40% and 60%, respectively. During the rest of the period, owning
houses
 was more universal than renting
houses
.
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