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You are having a graduation party next Saturday night. You have invited 50 people to celebrate at an outdoor barbecue evening, which may continue till late night.

#graduation #party #saturday #night #people #barbecue
Dear Mrs Jenny, I am writing to you to apologise about
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 graduation
party
 which
is
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will be tomorrow.
In
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this
party
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,party
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 I invited my classmates and we want to lead the
party
 outside till midnight. At night we are planning to turn on
music
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the music
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 because some of us want to
dancing
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dance
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. Sorry if we
are disturb
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are disturbing
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 you
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, from your sleep. And I will promise
stopping
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this
party
 faster as soon as possible.
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, I would be happy if you are visit our house the
next
 day after
party
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the party
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 for
conversation
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a conversation
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 by heart. I believe that you will be happy after all. I understand that it might be difficult for you to accept my apology, but I have
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no
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other
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another
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 way.
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Yours
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Your
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 faithfully, George
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