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Some people say the main purpose of advertising is to improve sales of products that people do not really need. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
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 modern era,
people
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 have differing views with regard to the question of what is the aim of advertising, some
people
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 claim that it is for
companies
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 to gain a
lot
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 of economic advantages.In my opinion, I strongly agree with
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 view for several reasons, which I will bring closer.
Firstly
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,
this
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 advertising can certainly encourage
people
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 to buy their products and win a
lot
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 of money , meaning that they try to say their
product
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 is fine and not
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 any negative side or consequences,
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, energetic drinks have a
lot
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 of harmful side effect that may cause serious health diseases, when they make advertising they will bring famous players and try say that if want to be a good play you must try our
product
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,
whereas
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, the fact their
product
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 is harmful. And to avoid that governments should pay attention to those advertising and educate
people
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 about the reality of
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product
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.
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, I believe that advertising
companies
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 spend a
lot
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 of money in favour of getting the attention of
people
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 to their products, they put their advertising on the TV , on the street, and even everywhere, that means they have
formule
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formula
that as many
companies
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 spend in advertising they certainly benefit much and much income . there are various types of advertising investments. These
companies
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 would not contribute in any event if they
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 not get advantages .
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,
this
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 is why I believe these advertising aims to collect money from as much as they can without giving attention to their
product
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's negative sides.They want just move forward for any cost.
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