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Your friend is thinking about learning to drive and would like some advice. Write a letter to your friend. - Say why a driving license is advantageous - Recommend a driving school - Give extra guidance/ tips

#friend #drive #advice #license #school #guidance #tips
Dear Albert, I am glad to hear that you have decided to learn
driving
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. The idea of learning to drive will definitely change your life. But
firstly
, you need to have
driving
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a driving
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 license which can be a way round to remove all the restrictions to drive anywhere with freedom. You will be independent in handling routine tasks
for instance
 office, shopping etc.
Moreover
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 it is a social and legal responsibility of being an ideal citizen.
Secondly
, you need to search
a
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for a
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good driving school with supportive &
experience
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experienced
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 instructors. I would like to recommend the Hall Driving School
in
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apply
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the
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down town
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. I, myself, have learnt from
this
 renowned driving school. All the instructors are
well trained
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 and experienced professionals. The medium of
instructions
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instruction
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include
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 both theoretical as well as practical aspects.
Moreover
, you will
also
 learn the traffic rules as well which are the foremost important in today’s life. To become proficient in all aspects you have to appear for an exam to test
you
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 knowledge of driving before obtaining
license
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a license
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. I think
,
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 a
two –week
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two–week
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 course will be sufficient for you to be perfect and clear the driving trust. I hope my advice will serve the purpose. Looking forward to
hear
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 from you. Love, Robert
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driving license
  • independence
  • commute
  • flexibility
  • reputable
  • certified instructors
  • high pass rate
  • road safety
  • regulations
  • driving conditions
  • driver's handbook
  • patience
  • practical skills
  • maneuverability
  • roadworthy
  • navigational skills
  • defensive driving
  • responsible attitude
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