When a country develops its technology, the traditional skill and ways of life die out.

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Introduction

Nowadays

technology

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has become a part of human beings ,

technology

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provides us

many

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things

those

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that

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are very useful for us

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apply

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apply

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aeroplane

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aeroplanes

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train

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trains

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, cars,etc.

lotbof

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lot of

lots of

people's

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people

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are forgotten

there

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their

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culture

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because they things update

yourself

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themselves

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according

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time.

Body paragraph 1

Overall,

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technology

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a technology

the technology

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invented many things that can make

leving

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living

beings

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beings'

being's

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life easier, every

coins

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coin

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have two

side

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like coin

technology

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also

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two

side

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positive and negative.

However

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, everyone

have

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has

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the

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freedom to live their life

according

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themselves. There were no restrictions against

culture

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, it was

depen

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depend

depends

on you which

culture

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you follow their

tradition

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traditional

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culture

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Conclusion

Technology

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can't

be change

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change

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the

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apply

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traditional

culture

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. 85%

Indians

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of Indians

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marriage

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marry

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according

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toaccording

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there

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their

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culture

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if he was poor, rich,

celebrities

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celebrity

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doesn't mean.

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Jan 20, 2023

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Linking words
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2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
29
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

111 words

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When a country develops its technology, the traditional skill and ways of life die out.

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. what are the advantage and disadvantage of giving children this message.

Most people could not go to work in quarantine period and stayed at home due to the Covid-19 pandemic. What problems lockdown may arise, and how can these problems be tackled.

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