When a country develops its technology, the traditional skill and ways of life die out.

Nowadays
technology
has become a part of human beings ,
technology
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things
those
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like
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,
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aeroplane
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train
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, cars,etc.
lotbof
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people's
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are forgotten
there
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culture
because they things update
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according
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time. Overall,
technology
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invented many things that can make
leving
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living
beings
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life easier, every
coins
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have two
side
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like coin
technology
also
two
side
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positive and negative.
However
, everyone
have
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a
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freedom to live their life
according
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themselves. There were no restrictions against
culture
, it was
depen
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depend
depends
on you which
culture
you follow their
tradition
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culture
.
Technology
can't
be change
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the
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traditional
culture
. 85%
Indians
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marriage
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according
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there
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their
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culture
if he was poor, rich,
celebrities
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doesn't mean.
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