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When a country develops its technology, the traditional skill and ways of life die out.

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Introduction
Nowadays
technology
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 has become a part of human beings ,
technology
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 provides us
many
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 things
those
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 are very useful for us
like
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apply
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,
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apply
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aeroplane
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aeroplanes
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,
train
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trains
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, cars,etc.
lotbof
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lot of
lots of
people's
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people
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 are forgotten
there
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their
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culture
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 because they things update
yourself
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themselves
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according
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 time.
Body paragraph 1
Overall,
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technology
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a technology
the technology
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 invented many things that can make
leving
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living
beings
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beings'
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 life easier, every
coins
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coin
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 have two
side
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sides
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 like coin
technology
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also
Linking Words
 two
side
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 positive and negative.
However
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, everyone
have
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a
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the
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 freedom to live their life
according
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 themselves. There were no restrictions against
culture
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, it was
depen
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depend
depends
 on you which
culture
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 you follow their
tradition
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traditional
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culture
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.
Conclusion
Technology
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 can't
be change
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the
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apply
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traditional
culture
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. 85%
Indians
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of Indians
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marriage
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marry
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according
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toaccording
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there
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their
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culture
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 if he was poor, rich,
celebrities
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celebrity
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 doesn't mean.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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