In the future it may be necessary for us to live on another planets.For this reason ,Some people believe that we should spend money now researching planets that could be possible home ,such as Mars.To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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past decades it has been believed that we should spend money to search

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as our home to live in near future

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as Mars.

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we have created climate changes. As a result of industrialisation ,carbon dioxide emission is rising rapidly.Most

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the countries like India, China and Russia release green gases beyond the control level.

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climate change which affect

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vigorously. But not only humans but

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innocent animals are suffering from

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issue.

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man can seek another place to live animals are incapable of doing it. So it is unethical to leave without thinking of those environmental creations.

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factors support my disagreement and we can take measures to reduce co2

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rather than escape from earth.

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,let's think that we will find another

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to go there.What will happen to people of poor countries,they will have to face upcoming issues .There will be huge competition among

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to acquire a chance and only wealthy individuals may win.So it is not a practical answer to leave

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earth without seeking possible solutions. To summarise,

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there is a belief that we will have to leave

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in future I am disagreed to spend more money on that.Before searching

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place we should find ways to reduce climate

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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extraterrestrial colonization
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environmental degradation
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economic stimulus
STEM education
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