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In many countries, not enough students study science subjects. What are the causes? What will be the effect on society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In many countries, fewer students choose to
study
science
 subjects. A lack of students studying
science
 can influence negatively the development of
this
 sphere.
This
 essay will explain the reasons and possible impacts of
this
 problem. I believe, that the main cause of
this
 issue is the difficulty of choosing
science
 to
study
. Most of the enlistments are concerned that there will be too much stress and strain if they
study
 in
this
 field. Partly, they are right, because studying
science
 takes a lot of time and needs enormous effort.
Nevertheless
, it's an honourable subject that will give many opportunities both for a student and society in the future. Another reason can be the low quality of education in universities. There are not enough universities specialising directly in
science
 subjects. So it can be not the best option for a student to choose them for studying. There are several negative effects on society. ,
First
 of all, not enough specialists in
science
 led to the degradation of the sphere. It means that there are fewer people who could make new breakthroughs and enhance
science
.
Secondly
, there are fewer people who work to improve the lives of others. Scientists are important for our society, as well as medics, teachers and other specialists working for people.
For instance
, without ,them there wouldn't be any medicaments and the education system in schools wouldn't be so diverse. In conclusion, the lack of admission to
study
science
 is a serious problem for the public. It interferes with the process of the development of
science
.
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