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some people believe that charities should help people in need no matter where those people are in the world/ Others feel that those organizations should only serve the people living in the country where they are based. discuss both sides and give your opinion

#people #charities #matter #world #organizations #country
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The table illustrates data about figures of
people
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 who visited Ashdown
Museum
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 before and after renovation while the 2 charts give information on the feedback of those who went to the
museum
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 twice. Overall, most individuals visited the
museum
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 after refurbishment.
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, prior to renovation, a high percentage of
people
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 were dissatisfied while after renovations the same number of individuals were satisfied.
To begin
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 with, before the
museum
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 was developed, a majority of
people
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 were dissatisfied and some were satisfied with 40 and 30 per cent respectively. Those who were very content were 15%, and 10% were very dissatisfied while a small percentage of 5 did not respond. Coming the year after Ashdown
museum
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 was developed, the figure of satisfied and very satisfied
people
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 increased. With the former going up by 10%, from 30% to 40% and the latter rising up by 20%, from 15% to 35%. The number of those who were dissatisfied prior to the renovation dropped significantly by more than half, from 40% down to 15% . The ones very dissatisfied
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 dropped the percentages by half from 10% to 5%. In both times 5% of those under the survey did not respond.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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