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In many countries people now wearing western clothes such as suits and jeans rathers than traditional clothing

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Nowadays, in many
countries
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,
people
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 are more and more used to wearing modern
clothes
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 and forget about their national
clothes
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.
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the positive
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 and negative sides.
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,
this
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 essay will discuss how modern
clothes
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 can
change
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 society.
Secondly
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, how stylish
clothes
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 destroy cultural tradition.
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 with,
people
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 today prefer to wear fashionable
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.
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 is why humans are less and less wearing traditional
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.
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, modern
clothes
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change
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 the mentality of
people
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. All of the population of the Earth is beginning to
change
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 their lives.
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, they are starting to create their own culture. Especially young
people
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 always want to switch fashion standards.
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, according to VOGUE, the
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 five years were the pick of the fashion industry.
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, some
countries
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 fully prefer modern
clothes
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such
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 as jeans, hoodies, sweaters, and so on. The top three
countries
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 include France, Italy, the USA, and Germany. The young generation even
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 not know what are their national
clothes
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.
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, these
clothes
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change
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 the stereotypes about the difference between
clothes
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 for men and women. But now both gender can wear whatever they want and like.
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 to
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, some
countries
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 still wear their nationwide dresses, but not always. Because of fashion, some nations begin to lose their cultural tradition. The young generation wears their national
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 just at festivals and carnivals.
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, according to Cambridge University, just a few
countries
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 save up their national
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 and cultural traditions. Especially, Thailand, Taiwan, Myanmar, and Vietnam one
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among
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 the most cultural
countries
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. To sum up, wearing none cultural
clothes
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 is
no
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not
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so
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as
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 bad as the old generation thinks.
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 is just the culture of young
people
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. In my opinion, we must not forget about our national
clothes
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 and continue to wear comfortable outfits for ourselves

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