In many countries people now wearing western clothes such as suits and jeans rathers than traditional clothing

There is no
denial
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that
people
have the freedom to choose what to wear.
Although
each nation has its own traditional
clothes
and projects, nowadays
people
are mostly wearing
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dress
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. I think
this
is a positive development
as a result
of the growing Western influence and
fashion
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the fashion
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industry. There are many different ways that can have a huge impact on the attitude of
people
when choosing
clothes
.
For example
, in films,
mostly
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most
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celebrities dress
with
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Western culture, which is very attractive.
As a result
, the community of civilians tend to imitate them and start wearing
the
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same way.
In addition
, the availability and low cost of these
clothes
play a vital role in getting
a
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popular
global
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.
For example
, anyone can visit the site
as
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Amazon or de Sheen and order
clothes
or
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UK when
people
find
clothes
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as
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they want and for low cost, they seem happy.
In addition
,
fast growing
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fashion in Western countries has increased the popularity of Western clothing worldwide. Since
this
field has no monopoly, and with great competition between designers ,
everyday
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, new styles of clothing appear, while traditional styles in some countries have very little changes.
Therefore
, as
people
like to be fashionable, demand grows fast. When
people
wear
fashion
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clothes
, they feel confident. So it's
also
positive for society.
Finally
,
although
there
are
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cultural clothing,
Western style
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dress has become common because of its great influence and different species.
However
,
people
need to achieve
balance
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a balance
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on
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clothing between their own culture and Western culture.
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