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In many countries people now wearing western clothes such as suits and jeans rathers than traditional clothing

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There is no
denial
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 that
people
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 have the freedom to choose what to wear.
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 each nation has its own traditional
clothes
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 and projects, nowadays
people
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 are mostly wearing
Western style
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Western-style
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dress
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dresses
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. I think
this
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 is a positive development
as a result
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 of the growing Western influence and
fashion
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the fashion
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 industry. There are many different ways that can have a huge impact on the attitude of
people
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 when choosing
clothes
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.
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, in films,
mostly
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most
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 celebrities dress
with
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in
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 Western culture, which is very attractive.
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, the community of civilians tend to imitate them and start wearing
the
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 same way.
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, the availability and low cost of these
clothes
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 play a vital role in getting
a
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apply
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popular
global
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globally
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.
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, anyone can visit the site
as
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Amazon or de Sheen and order
clothes
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or
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in or
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 UK when
people
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 find
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clothes
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the clothes
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as
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apply
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they want and for low cost, they seem happy.
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,
fast growing
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fast-growing
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 fashion in Western countries has increased the popularity of Western clothing worldwide. Since
this
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 field has no monopoly, and with great competition between designers ,
everyday
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, new styles of clothing appear, while traditional styles in some countries have very little changes.
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, as
people
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 like to be fashionable, demand grows fast. When
people
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 wear
fashion
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fashionable
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clothes
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, they feel confident. So it's
also
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 positive for society.
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,
although
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 there
are
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is
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 cultural clothing,
Western style
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Western-style
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 dress has become common because of its great influence and different species.
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,
people
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 need to achieve
balance
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a balance
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on
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in
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 clothing between their own culture and Western culture.

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