Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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view that it is so simple that

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no longer pay concentration to it.

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I support

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my view.

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to buy their goods.

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why

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in the market by us, so

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advertising

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to buy

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convinced to purchase

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advertisements

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, they reckon that most

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the shampoo

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that different types of vitamins are present in their shampoo, but

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rate to watch

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their concentration and

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their main

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instead

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today

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former

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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persuade
promote
attract
influence
impact
consumerism
commercialism
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product
brand
endorsement
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distracting
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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

Prevention is better than cure. Out of a country’s health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventive measure. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many people choose to travel abroad to learn a foreign language instead of studying in their hometown. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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The internet has become profoundly efficient and popular that people choose it as a platform to learn. Some believe that it would eventually replace the need for books. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that the higher a product is priced, the more likely it is that people will want to buy it. To what extent does price influence potential buyers? What other factors influence people to buy a product?