Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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people
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people
to buy goods,
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while other
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other
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others
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view that it is so simple that
human
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humans
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no longer pay concentration to it.
personally
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I support
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formar
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formal
proposition and will discuss relevant points along with precise examples and
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my view.
First
of all, different types of
advertisement
motivate us to buy
products
, they
provides
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descrete
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discrete
types of merits of their
products
,
as
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and as
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a result,
people
are
influencing
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to buy their goods.
For example
, when consumers see
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an advertisement
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advertisement
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advertisements
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,
why
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about why
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Horlicks is useful for our health,
then
we influence to buy
it
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them
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.
Secondly
, it is difficult to know every new
products
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product
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in the market by us, so
that
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apply
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advertising
help
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helps
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us to know
new
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about new
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products
.
moreover
, it is
guideline
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a guideline
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how
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on how
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to use it,
hence
,
people
are interest
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are interested
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to buy
products
.
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, noodles when came to the market, users knew by
advertisement
, after
the
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they
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convinced to purchase
it
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them
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.
However
,a significant number of
people
do not trust
advertisement
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advertisements
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, they reckon that most
of
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the
advertisement
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advertisements
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do not provide accurate information,
as a result
, they are not dependent on
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the advertisement
an advertisement
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advertisement
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advertisements
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.
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, most
of
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the shampoo
advertisement
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advertisements
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showing
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that different types of vitamins are present in their shampoo, but
people
are not getting
expected
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the expected
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result
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results
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according to their
advertisement
.
Moreover
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most
of
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apply
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the
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people
not
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do not
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interest
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rate to watch
advertisement
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advertisements
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because it
hamper
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hampers
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their concentration and
interrupt
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interrupts
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their main
task
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tasks
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.
For example
, when
people
watch TV shows during
this
time any
advertisement
break their concentration that's why
,
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they do not concentrate
advertisement
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on advertisement
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even when
people
read newspapers they only focus
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news
pieces of news
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instead
of
advertisement
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an advertisement
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. in conclusion, it is obvious that
people
are divided in their opinion
according
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toaccording
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their
plan
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plans
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.
however
, if
people
do not follow
advertisement
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advertisements
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, the
advertisement
would not increase
drammatically
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dramatically
. so from
todays
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today
today's
context
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former
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argue
are gaining more popularity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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