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Air transport is increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetables to other countries where they cannot be grown or are out of season. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

#air #transport #fruit #vegetables #countries #season
Countries who
has
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have
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 an excessive supply
for
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of
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goods
are
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oftenly
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often
 export them
through
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apply
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overseas and regarding
this
, they are exporting their
excessive
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excess
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goods
 to other countries by using
air
transport
. In
this
 context,
air
transport
 is increasingly used to deliver these following
goods
such
 as
fruit
 and
vegetables
 to other countries
who
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that
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 cannot meet their
domestical
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domestic
 needs due to they cannot
be
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being
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 grown or
out
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are out
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 of a season.
This
 essay will show us both the advantages and disadvantages
for
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of
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 using
air
transport
 to
transport
fruit
 and
vegetables
.
To begin
 with,
air
transport
 (
airplanes
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aeroplanes
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 or helicopters) is commonly used to deliver
goods
 and they offer you a high-speed delivery to the destination place. It can give us the advantages of delivering the following
goods
 like
fruit
 and
vegetables
.
For example
,
air
transport
 can lower the possibility of
fruit
 and
vegetables
to
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apply
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getting rotten because is quicker than ships in terms of supply chain purposes. It can make your
goods
be arrived
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arrive
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 on time.
Therefore
,
air
transport
 is more reliable than any other transporter.
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