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These days huge portions of population are moving from rural areas to urban areas. Do you think it is a positive or a negative trend?

#portions #population #areas #trend
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Nowadays, a huge number of
people
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 are moving from rural to urban
areas
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. I believe, it is a good trend.
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 of all, rural
areas
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 are not at all developed as compared to urban
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.
People
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 from rural area wants to have a better lifestyle and better education for their
children
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.
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, there are schools in rural
areas
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 as well
children
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 will get more exposure to education in the metropolitan cities.
People
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also
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 move to urban
areas
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 for better job opportunities, so they can have a stable and good lifestyle.
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, the
people
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 of Rajasthan are very good at making statues and their artwork is remarkable, so they travel to urban
areas
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 like Mumbai and Pune for better job opportunities like carpentry and making attractive sculptures.
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,
people
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 should move to urban
areas
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 for better jobs and a good lifestyle for their
children
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.
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, the ladies in the rural
areas
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 are not empowered due to which many
people
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 don't respect them. Them moving to a city, where the government encourages women to participate in different activities like making clothes and paper utensils. The government
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 gives them daily wages for living and makes rural females stand up on their feet.
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, the government of India has introduced many women empowerment schemes that are beneficial for females.
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, folks are travelling from rural
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 to urban
areas
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 for
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better
lifestyles
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lifestyle
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 and getting good wages as compared to rural
areas
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. In conclusion, I adhere that it is a positive trend that
people
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 are travelling from rural
areas
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 to cities and having a safe future for their
children
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 and for themselves.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • migration
  • urbanization
  • positive trend
  • negative trend
  • economic opportunities
  • infrastructure
  • services
  • standard of living
  • overcrowding
  • strained resources
  • pollution
  • environmental problems
  • rural livelihoods
  • culture
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