Some people think that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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, some
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support to take an action for these situations and do not accept them. In fact, focusing
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things
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do not ensure satisfaction for a
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, is essential for creating
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personality for himself,
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, in some
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, accepting these
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occasions
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person
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's mental health.
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indirect connection between mental health and your way of thinking
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the issues. Considering your
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in light of the things that you have already might provide a chance for
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to focus on their
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, when a
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working in the field of law, is unhappy about his job,
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he might
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lose everything that he has
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because there might be murphy law to support the circle of unsatisfaction.
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, the mentality that just
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the
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things that you have might show to you
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a good side
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of your
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. It is because
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every bad situation in our
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has a reason and folks can
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easily
find some points that might be
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step, that's why it might be important to try to find the side of the bottle which is already fulfilled. All in all, these two types of
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of thinking are just
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few of the benefits of having strong mental health. While the points mentioned above show strong arguments, to
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achieve
a strong personality, creating a
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who
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up is much more important to face
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the
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problems
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. There is a collaboration between suffering and reaching
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better conditions in
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's
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''no pain, no gain'' always resonate well while considering human being belongs to
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area. Each
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the
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person
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people
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in
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society
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bad
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occasions, sometimes they have to be
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employed
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company which they do not like, but there is always a solution, it is just facing
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it,
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to replace it with the better one.
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, the idea of being a
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who never gives up might play a beneficial role in the situations. The reason behind
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, whenever a
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find
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finds
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himself in a bad situation
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he might just focus
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ways that he can solve the issue or improve the
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standards
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, the mentality behind it
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is always
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be
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supporter
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a supporter
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while he faces
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them. Overall,
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taking
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these
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arguments
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can demonstrate just the few
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of the solutions. In conclusion, while it has been being
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debatable
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fighting
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with the
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instead
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accepting
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of accepting
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them or
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the natural sources of success are
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,
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us the essential part of the question with the respect of
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who try to improve their conditions while others just maintaining their unhappy faces.
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