Some people believe that students should be given one long vacation each year. Others believe that students should have several short vacations throughout the year. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.

I guess, all
students
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like holidays. due to having a
lot
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leisure to have fun with friends, play games and hang out
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long vacations might damage the learning process. in my opinion several short vacations in better than one long and in
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essay I will support my view with examples
firstly
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, if
students
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have a long vacation they will get exhausted before the holiday
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in our country we have the holiday for 3 months and we have a class for 9 months and after a long
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most of the pupils get exhausted .
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, all teachers like the
students
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may tired after a long time and can't teach correctly and
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result
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they get angry soon and they don't listen to pupils' problems. to conclude, the basis of my view is based on
couple
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a couple
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of reasons , I agree that
students
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should have several short vacations
instead
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of one long

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