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Some people think that people in senior positions alone should make decisions in a business, while others think that employees should be involved in the decision-making process too. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some would say that people who are only
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senior
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position
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 should take a decision in a company.
However
, many argue that other
employees
also
 should take
part
 in
this
 process.
This
 essay agrees with the latter point and will show that, despite the experience of managers in that field, junior
employees
 might
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 suggestions as they are
also
 a
part
 of an organization. To commence with, some believe that higher members of
workplace
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 are alone take decisions.
This
 is because
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 they work in the
comapany
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company
 for many years and are more experienced. Knowledge of that field would help them to choose what is beneficial for
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 success.
For instance
, in big companies,
top level
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 management
are
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 likely to indulge in judgements as they are trustworthy and gain expertise in work which only gives
right
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 choice to the organization.
On the other hand
 , there is no doubt that
employees
 are
the
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part
 of a firm and their success. If they are allowed to engage in
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the decision-making
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 procedure, it
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 an opportunity for them to share their ideas,
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 their skills which
helps
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 the firm in making
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 choice.
In addition
 to that, it
also
 saves time as asking
employees
 for their opinion not only gives a different perspective to make
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a decision
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decision
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 but
also
 young peoples are more
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 to express themselves than higher management. In conclusion,
although
 senior position people should take a decision as they are more experienced,
this
 essay believes that
employees
 should
also
involved
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 in
this
 process because they are
part
 of a business and it gives them an opportunity to share their points.
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