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Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 to 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market

#japanese #tourists #australia #tourist #market
The chart describes the
amount
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 of tourists from
Japan
 travelling out of the country between 1985
an
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and
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 1995 and the shares of
Japanese
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the Japanese
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 tourist market in
Australia
. The number of Japanese people going abroad is counted in millions and the influx of Japanese community to
Australia
 is shown as a percentage over
this
 decade.     Overall, there is a
significant
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up rise
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 from 1985 to 1995 in both charts
accordingly
. The population who travelled out of
Japan
 is quite prominent as there is a
four fold
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 rise over ten years and along with that, the Australian shares in
tourist
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 market
has
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 gradually gone up by three folds.  
During
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 1985, approximately five million people
have
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travelled out of
Japan
 and around only two
percent
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 of that population has come
in to
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Australia
 which accounts
to
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 the least amount of people travelling in and out of
Australia
 and
Japan
, respectively.
However
, a steep drop of 0.5% is present during 1989 in the Australian tourist market.
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