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Nuclear energy is better than other sources of energy for meeting the ever-increasing global energy need. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In a modern world with its highly increasing
energy
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consumption
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 the issue of finding the best
energy
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 resource is
highly
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a highly
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 important
one
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. Some people claim that nuclear
energy
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 is better
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then
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 others. In my opinion,
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 true, nuclear plans which produce electricity using nuclear fusion are much safer and can be built almost in all locations compared to plants using other
energy
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 resources. The safety issue for the environment and
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 for people
in general
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 is the main point which should be taken into consideration
while
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 comparing different types of
energy
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 producers. And modern nuclear plants,
as
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I think, are the
safiest
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safest
 ones. They are
subjects
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 to
the
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strict government, scientific, and international
organisations
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organisations'
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 regulations, which provide
enormous
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an enormous
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 level of control over the processes while
producing
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.
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, the high level of
technologies
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technology
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which
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that
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 scientific society has nowadays
allow
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 them to provide
the
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 comprehensive security level at
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this
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 plants. Which, in turn, can prevent any
sorts
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 of errors in the process of production, and
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 any detrimental consequences. Another reason why I consider them as a better source is
possibility
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the possibility
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 to built them at almost any place over the globe, except those areas with
high
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 probability of earthquakes and other natural disasters. Nuclear factories should not rely on gas pipelines to transport natural gas or railroads to transport coal.
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, they are not
depended
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 on natural phenomena
as
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 winds, sunshine, tides,
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and waterflows
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waterflows
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water flows
 in rivers,
thus
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it
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 can be constructed even in countries
wich
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 do not have any of these. In conclusion, despite there
are
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 a lot of debate around
safety
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 of nuclear
energy
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, and
wether
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whether
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 people should develop
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energy
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 sector
this
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 way, I think that it is a better resource of safe and clean
energy
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 for humankind.
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 it can be built in most countries on the Earth.
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