You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to study/work.

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Dear Sir or Madam. I am writing to inform you about my issue with a new roommate who moved into my

room

a few weeks ago. My name is Alex Lee, and I am studying Mechanical engineering at the upper campus. My student's hostel is "B," and I live in

room

23. I have been living in

this

student's hostel for almost three years and shared my

room

with many students. All of them were very quiet and friendly, and I haven't had any problems with them. But the

last

one finished his education and left the

room

a few weeks ago. Since the end of January, I have lived with a new roommate who has been moved from "A" hostel due to inappropriate behaviour that interrupts other students' study process. The

first

two weeks were regular, and I didn't see him very often, maybe in the evening or early morning when we went to the college.

However

, in the

last

few days, he has returned to his unnormal behaviour that disrupts my studying. He listens to very loud music, and his friends visit him in the evenings and play video games until midnight. I have tried to speak with him and explain that I have my

last

year at the university and have a diploma work that demands a lot of concentration and quit. But it is not convinced him.

Therefore

, I am asking for your help to resolve

this

situation by either speaking with him or finding me an alternative

room

. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully. Alex Lee

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Lexical resource: 8.0

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Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to study/work.

Fully explain your ideas

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Some people believe that it is good for a country’s culture to import foreign movies and TV programmes. Others think that it is better to produce these locally. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.