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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to study/work.

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Dear Sir or Madam. I am writing to inform you about my issue with a new roommate who moved into my
room
 a few weeks ago. My name is Alex Lee, and I am studying Mechanical engineering at the upper campus. My student's hostel is "B," and I live in
room
 23. I have been living in
this
 student's hostel for almost three years and shared my
room
 with many students. All of them were very quiet and friendly, and I haven't had any problems with them. But the
last
 one finished his education and left the
room
 a few weeks ago. Since the end of January, I have lived with a new roommate who has been moved from "A" hostel due to inappropriate behaviour that interrupts other students' study process. The
first
 two weeks were regular, and I didn't see him very often, maybe in the evening or early morning when we went to the college.
However
, in the
last
 few days, he has returned to his unnormal behaviour that disrupts my studying. He listens to very loud music, and his friends visit him in the evenings and play video games until midnight. I have tried to speak with him and explain that I have my
last
 year at the university and have a diploma work that demands a lot of concentration and quit. But it is not convinced him.
Therefore
, I am asking for your help to resolve
this
 situation by either speaking with him or finding me an alternative
room
. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully. Alex Lee
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