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The pie chart depicts the average number ratio in typical meals of three types of nutrients (
sodium
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, saturated fat, and
sugar
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) and all of them may be harmful if eaten too much. As an overview, it is seen that
dinner
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 has too much
sodium
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level
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 and saturated fat. As well as
snacks
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 contain much-added
sugar
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 in meals. The
level
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 of
sodium
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 is very low in
breakfast
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 and the
snacks
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 People in the USA eat
snacks
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 that have the highest
level
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 of
sugar
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 42%. It is followed by
dinner
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 with 23%. While
breakfast
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 has a minimum
level
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 of added
sugar
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 only 16%.
Moreover
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, there is a high
level
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 of
sodium
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 in the
dinner
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 43%.
In addition
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,
breakfast
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 and
snacks
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 both have the same percentage of
sodium
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 14%.
Furthermore
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, there is 37% of saturated fat in
dinner
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 and 26% fat in lunch.
However
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, only 16% of fat is in
breakfast
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.
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