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The pie chart depicts the average number ratio in typical meals of three types of nutrients (
sodium
, saturated fat, and
sugar
) and all of them may be harmful if eaten too much. As an overview, it is seen that
dinner
 has too much
sodium
level
 and saturated fat. As well as
snacks
 contain much-added
sugar
 in meals. The
level
 of
sodium
 is very low in
breakfast
 and the
snacks
 People in the USA eat
snacks
 that have the highest
level
 of
sugar
 42%. It is followed by
dinner
 with 23%. While
breakfast
 has a minimum
level
 of added
sugar
 only 16%.
Moreover
, there is a high
level
 of
sodium
 in the
dinner
 43%.
In addition
,
breakfast
 and
snacks
 both have the same percentage of
sodium
 14%.
Furthermore
, there is 37% of saturated fat in
dinner
 and 26% fat in lunch.
However
, only 16% of fat is in
breakfast
.
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