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ZDeveloped countries have created many environmental problems in the world, particularly in thier contribution to global warming. Why is global warming a problem? What can be done to reduce the dangers of global warming?

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many countries around the world produce greenhouse and other west materials that are poisoning the plant.especially, global warming,which is increasing the temperature of the earth,.it is a problem because it is causing the melting of ice in the articles which
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 it will cause environmental disasters,
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, the melting of the ice in the article where a high quantity of water flowing into oceans leads to
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 in the water level that my course seeking a large space of lands.
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, cause dryness to air and soil,which are essential for the plants, and
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 leads the plants to die.
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, these complications require serious solutions to overcome them.
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, reducing greenhouse through a series of regulations by the government of the factories.secondary, increase the number of plants by motivating the public to grow them in their gardens.
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, provide alternatives to cars .for instant, electric buses,which can hold several people and do not damage the air. to conclude, industrial countries cause global warming and
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 killing the planet slowly in order that government and the public stud and watch without doing anything the life on the planet will be distinguished.
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, solutions have been provided to overcome these problems.
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