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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both these view points and give your own opinion.

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Happiness is basically a state of mind. It comes within the inner soul. As every coin has two sides, society’s people are divided into two groups and
therefore
, whether the happiest
time
 of human
life
 is childhood or adulthood has become a topic of debate.
This
 essay will compare and contrast both points of view along with my opinion. On one side of the argument, there are people who think that young age is the most enjoyable
time
 of
life
. The main reason for believing
this
 is that teenagers have fewer responsibilities than adults. They are lucky to have full financial and emotional support from their parents and guardians. Teenagers’ one and only task are to focus on their studies while developing innate abilities, interpersonal skills and technical skills which may use in their future development.
On the other hand
, individuals who held another viewpoint say that
adult
life
 brings more happiness. A person usually has more
adult
 years while teenage limits to 7 years.
Therefore
, everyone has a long
adult
life
 to enjoy, make more friends and relationships, and get a high career progression. A
second
 point is that you can select your responsibilities when you become an
adult
 and fulfilling those on
time
 makes you happy. At some point in
life
, you may feel fatigued and
anxiety
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. “If
life
 gives you lemons, make lemonade”,
this
 small thought can sparkle your whole
life
 forever. In conclusion, I believe both arguments have their merits.
However
, I believe the
adult
 years are the best
time
 of
life
.
This
 is because adolescents can make you from zero to a hero.
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