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Please explain how sugar is produced from sugar cane as shown in the diagram.

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A quick glance at the diagram illustrates how many stages are required in order to exaggerate
sugar
. By and large, there are 3 main phases beginning with growing
sugar
 canes and harvesting, followed by crushing them and purifying, evaporating, and
finally
 extracting
sugar
 crystals to dry and cool them. In terms of taking look at the initial stages,
sugar
canes
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 are grown for 1 to 1.5 years before harvesting by hand or machine. The harvested
sugar
 canes are crushed and turned into a liquid juice.
This
 is followed by
purifying
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 a limestone filter. With regards to consecutive processes, the purified juice is evaporated by heating and became syrup. Subsequent to
this
 step,
sugar
 crystals are separated from the syrup under the centrifuge process and
finally
sugar
 is available for use after the drying and cooling steps.
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