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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Other say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is undeniable that environmental problems considerably impact our lives. Certain people consider that
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 particular species of plants and animals is
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 problem in our time. In my opinion,
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losing
 those species is the main problem. Species variety can maintain the
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 of food chains so that could maintain Despite the stability of food chains being important, certain
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people consider that there are other main environmental problems,
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 as extreme weather. In recent years, there is more and more extreme weather
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 all around the world like floods in South Asia, forest fires in Australia and other forms of extreme disaster. All of
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 weather caused thousands of people to die and
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 millions of citizens. it shows that
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  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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