In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The developing public transportation system has become an important issue in many overpopulated cities, with conflicting views on what vehicle has more priority to develop. One possible answer is creating new
railways
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for high-speed
trains
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, which could provide quick transport between different destinations. Advocates of
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believe that high-speed
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could provide commuters with
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after
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travelling. If people use private
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for their journeys, they would need more concentration on the roads, the lack of which is the main reason
of
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most accidents.
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, using a phone or listening to a piece of music during traversing is sometimes unavoidable, which could be done safely through train-based travelling. As well as safety, you will have more time to sleep or
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your
works
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during traversing by
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, which could become more popular by developing railway lines for promoting high-speed
trains
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.
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, there may be more important parts for spending money rather than
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. Let us not forget that the number of commuters in cities
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much more than those who travel between long-distance destinations.
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, it seems that the
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of motorways,
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are used by buses, cars, and motorcycles, has a priority
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railways
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. By improving the intercity ways, we will face
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lower traffic
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, leading flower and more convenient commuting in cities. There is a flow-on effect here
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because if we can reduce traffic congestion, we can
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cut down on air pollution. In conclusion, spending on
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apply
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railways
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development is too narrow an approach and would not
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effecting results as much as the motorways improvement. In my opinion,
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should allocate their budget based on
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road and highway promotion.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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