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Some people want that governments to spend money on looking for life on other planets, others, however think that it is a waste of public money when the earth has so many problems. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #governments #money #life #planets #waste #earth
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Science and technology
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 been developed by leaps and bounds over the past decade. So, a section of people
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 of the
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view
 that governments should invest in exploring outer space while others
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believe
 that attention ought to be drawn to tackle the pressing
issuies
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issues
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 on our planet. I totally agree with the latter statement that the
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 money
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 to be spent on resolving hot issues.
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views
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 arguments. Apparently, the advances in technology and science give opportunities to investigate outer space and governments have
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cruical
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crucial
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 for spending
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 budget on it.
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,
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natural resources
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 as fossil fuels are going to be finished and most
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lack
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electricity, petrol and water, so it would be good to
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find
 a planet with loads of natural
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resources
 in order to save
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 from
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scarsity
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scarcity
 of
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resources
.
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, a section of society
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 that there are vital issues like
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scarsity
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 of drinking water,
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 and
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various
 diseases, and
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tax-payers
 money must work
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 that direction. If governments would have been invested their
resourses
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resources
 in solving these matters the number of people who suffer would be less.
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, had some African
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 had support from developed
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 in managing the deficit of water, the citizens of those counties would thrive. In conclusion, the budget of
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 should
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 on
tackiling
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tackling
 problems on our planet rather than spending it on searching
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 space spots to live.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented opportunities
  • extraterrestrial
  • satisfy human curiosity
  • practical benefits
  • inspiring goal
  • testament to human ambition
  • pursuit of knowledge
  • critics argue
  • imprudent
  • plague Earth
  • immediate attention
  • allocated for
  • environmental conservation
  • well-being
  • quality of life
  • balanced approach
  • advancements
  • benefits for humanity
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