Government should spend more money on education than sports. Do you agree or disagree?

In
this
day and age ,it is hotly debated that authorities should allocate much more funds to schooling rather than leisure and competitive games. I do agree that the national budget should prioritise schools and universities,as they boost a nation's economy and
its
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health. Investment in schooling is one of the best ways to improve a country's life .
This
is because after graduation from modern
universities
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people tend to think differently and can create updated technology.
For example
,South Korea and the USA decided to allot funds for education.
Then
,the former founded Samsung and LG, and the latter founded Dell, which did boost the nation's productivity as well as innovation,bringing
millions
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of dollars,annually. Education not only is just improving a nation's budget ,but
also
it can lead to some health benefits. Due to the fact that all spheres including science get better,it is highly likely that by making some medicine in order to prevent life-threatening diseases.
For example
,China's medical technologies would have been highly advanced,the number of dead people had been eliminated and the coronavirus had been deterred from spreading.
Thus
, education should take precedence over sports because,aformentionatedly, it does bring income and health benefits.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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