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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of diverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages. In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of diverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages.

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It has been predicted that in the future ,times all
vehicles
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driver–free . In my opinion, it would have a positive impact as driverless motor
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 would be efficient, and punctual and there would be low rates of accidents. On one hand, many people support human drivers due to the trust and handling of complex components of
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 it is seen that
these robotic machinery
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 cost an ample amount of money and require high maintenance charges.
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, many individuals don't prefer self-driving
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 as it would increase the economic burden and they may
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 unlearn how to drive manually.
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, would cost 100% more as compared to manual
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, the biggest advantage of self-driven
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 is a lesser
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 of accidents.
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, it was observed in Japan that automatic buses had 50% lesser rates of road traffic accidents as compared to normal ones.
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, automatic
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 are more efficient in comparison with fatigability seen in humans. They have the ability to perform tasks in a reliable manner even during long working hours.
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 are very consistent and precise than humans whereas they have the ability to perform tasks around the clock and don't require vacations, sick leaves or breaks. Overall, I believe that automatic machinery is very expensive to purchase and could lead to higher rates of unemployment but it is effective in terms of productivity and benefits passengers in the longer run.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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