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World would be better place if women on the leadership do you agree or disagree with statement

#world #place #women #leadership
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In
this
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 modern epoch,
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man
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men
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 and
women
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 have
a
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 same position without any discrimination,
however
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. few mankind proclaim that
women
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's
leadership
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 would be
place
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a place
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for
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the
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world wide
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worldwide
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.I totally disagree with
this
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 above Nation and I have discussed
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the disagreement
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 side in
forthcoming
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the forthcoming
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 paragraph To
comments
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with
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 the cons side of
this
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phenomenal
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.
First
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 and foremost,
women
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's
leadership
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 can lead
many
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to many
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 consequences
in
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worldwide.
additionally
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,
women
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 have everything of knowledge in the home regarding
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work
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 or management .but,they cannot able to do manage
whole
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 family.
It everything
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depend
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 on the
man
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 and
mostly
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most
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 work
which
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related to outdoor
works
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work
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that
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all managed by
man
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 ,and if any
women
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 take big
leadership
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 they cannot able to work as a
man
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 do and it
take
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 many
constitution
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constitutions
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 is like
financial
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a financial
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 crisis
mis management
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mismanagement
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 of the
nation
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 structure and other things.
furthermore
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,
mostly
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 countries have a
man
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 president rather than
women
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 because their people know that,
man
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have
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further
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 knowledge and ability to handle a critical
situation
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 rather than
women
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Secondly
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 ,
women
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 always think through emotionally and many
survey
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 say that
,
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men think less emotionally rather than
women
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.In
other word
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,
man
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have
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any
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the
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 ability which
aid
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aids
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 any Nation and any particular family's management.
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,Pakistan,Bangladesh and
other country
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another country
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 like
India
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 ruled their Natural sources and decrease their GDP in
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leadership
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the leadership
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 of
women
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.Namely,Indira Gandhi who is the Prime Minister of
India
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 made
bunch
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a bunch
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 of poor
policy
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policies
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 which ruled
India
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's economy and fade
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India
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 reputation ahead of
other country
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another country
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.
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,
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in crisis
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crisis
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crises
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,conflicts and
also
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 in
a
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big
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situation
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situations
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women
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 think through their hurt.Due to
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,they may spoil their good
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 on any big
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.
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,
many
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in many
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 big
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situation
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situations
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for
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 example,in
a
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the
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 Russia and Ukraine conflict,Shri Narendra Modi had
a
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enable
to
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him to
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 take back
India
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's people who
stuck
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were stuck
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 in
Russia-Ukraine
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the Russia-Ukraine
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 war by stopping
war
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the war
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 in
the
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Russia and Ukraine.
To
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 conclusion ,for decreasing conflict and violence
in
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apply
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worldwide
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world wide
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worldwide
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,men present good
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leadership
lidership
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leadership
 rather than
women
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