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University education should be free to anyone, regardless of their income. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#university #education #anyone #income
The table represents the percentage of
students
' number studying in four different types of secondary
schools
 during the period between 2000 and 2009. Overall, it can be seen that Voluntary controlled
schools
 have the highest
rate
 of student attendance decreasing among the four different types of
schools
 during these 9 years, while the community
schools
 scored the highest
rate
 of
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 during the same duration. In detail, Voluntary controlled
schools
 started at the highest
rate
 of
students
 attendance at 52% in 2000,
then
 a declining
happend
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happened
happen
 to become 38%
at
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 2005, and because of
this
continous
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continuous
decreasing
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, the
rate
 of attendance in 2009 reached 20%,
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 the other hand, community
schools
 have the least
propartion
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proportion
preparation
 of
students
 equal with Specialist
Schools
 at 12% in 2000, but a fast increasing happened to
this
rate
 during the nine years put them on the top of other types at 58%. Specialist
Schools
 and Grammar
schools
whitnessed
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witnessed
 a percentage of
students
 at 12%,
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% respectively in 2000, both
schools
 experienced a
decreasing
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 in
this
rate
 during the
next
 5 years to become 11%,12%, until these proportions settled at 10%, 12% in 2009, so the specialist
schools
 became the least favourite type of
schools
 to attend by
students
 at that year.
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