In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?
A rule is proposed in some states of America that makes
a
limitation on Correct article usage
the
time
which
Correct word choice
that
teenagers
can spend out of home at nights
. The key reason is Fix the agreement mistake
night
protecting
physically and physiologically young Change preposition
to protecting
people
from risks and threats in
outdoors at late Change preposition
apply
nights
Fix the agreement mistake
night
such
as addiction and street fighting. In my opinion, teenage
period is a critical step and Add an article
the teenage
teenagers
are affected easily by other people
. Therefore
the curfew should be operated to prevent teenage girls and boys to spend outdoors in late hours.
To begin
with, excitement is a significant matter which is important for new
generation and they choose any activity which makes them Add an article
a new
the new
exciting
and Replace the word
excited
increase
Adrenaline hormones. A recent article in US news illustrates that children who are between 13 to 17 ages will experience twice of releasing Adrenaline at Change the verb form
increases
night
. Therefore
, teenagers
prefer to spend their leisure time
whit their friends in out
of Change preposition
outside
homes
to become more pleasure and experience new items, Correct pronoun usage
their homes
people
, areas and activities. Some teenagers
use addicted
drugs Replace the word
addictive
such
as Amphetamine, Marijuana or cigarette to achieve more
happy life. Add an article
a more
Also
, most of
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apply
night
street fighting Add an article
the night
are
between young Correct subject-verb agreement
is
people
to show their power or having
a new experience Wrong verb form
have
Change preposition
in which
which
Correct word choice
and
teenagers
can be hurt or killed in the fighting.
Moreover
, late
Add a hyphen
late-night
night
outdoor activities impact directly on
Change preposition
apply
teenagers
’ psychological and physical. Teenage
period is a step to prepare children Correct article usage
The teenage
become
mature Add the particle
to become
and
adults which should be completed Correct word choice
apply
by
family Change preposition
through
supports
. What is more, children should sleep at a particular Fix the agreement mistake
support
time
at night
to some hormones can release easily and growing
process will be done completely. Add an article
the growing
However
enough sleeping
Replace the word
sleep
affect
Change the verb form
affects
teenagers
’ physical shape, it has direct
effect on their Add an article
a direct
behaviors
when they are communicating with their families, friends and other Change the spelling
behaviours
people
. Therefore
, teenagers
should be at home in
a particular Change preposition
at
time
at
Change preposition
of
night
to not damage themselves.
On the whole, a curfew is proposed is
some American areas to avoid Correct your spelling
in
teenagers
from outdoors
at a special Add a missing verb
being outdoors
time
. The rule Fix the agreement mistake
times
raised
Add a missing verb
was raised
due to
preventing
Wrong verb form
prevent
teenagers
’ damage which happen
by using drugs, street fighting, lack of sleep and Change the verb form
happens
face
with inappropriate citizens. I believe that Change the verb form
faces
teenagers
should spend their time
with their family members and appropriate friends in an
allowed Correct article usage
the
time
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