Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both shools and parents are resposible for solving this problem. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Today, the vast majority of young generations do not follow a healthy style of life. Many people believe that not only parents but
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schools are accountable in order to resolve
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concern. My opinion about
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idea probably falls somewhere in the middle, since the children often are not able to control their
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and distinguish what is advisable for them, but more depends on their self-awareness about something wrong.
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both approaches.   One idea proposes that people at
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age cannot manage to restrain themselves from junk
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, they need parental or
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monitoring. Because in case responsible persons maintain teenagers with
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healthy
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, they are not going to face problems with nutrition. Particularly, education establishments play a considerable role, as nowadays more
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is being consumed by children at school. Dutch schools can
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is
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free of charge for the full functioning of the
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, meals are given according to
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schedule.
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technique provides strict control and even leaves no worries for parents.
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means that schools can
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a youth's healthy lifestyle.   But on the downside, unbalanced feeding is inevitable among young unless they are conscious about
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insalubrity. Now it has reached a point where a growing number of
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aimlessly eat anything they want without thinking that it could harm their body in a number of ways.
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, sometimes they do not obey anyone, nor their parents,
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school. And often it is likely to worsen the gaps even trying to
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a problem. So owing to
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, children need to
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harm and get rid of bad
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habits
, building
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right style of life themselves without interventions.   Having concluded my ideas, young ones need adult control, but it is controllable as soon as they comprehend it
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their own
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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