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Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or disadvantages?

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The majority of people
work
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 very long hours and they only spend a very little amount of
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for
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on
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leisure
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activities
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. In my opinion, long working hours have more bad sides than good sides.
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 the workspace has some major advantages
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 as
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 salary and becoming a more experienced professional.
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, people who prefer to spend less
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for
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leisure
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activities
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 and
work
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 more mainly earn more salary than others.
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, computer programmers sometimes even
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 on weekends and they rarely have hobbies. But their wage is higher than others.
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, when individuals spend more
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, eventually they become more experienced.
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, there are some major disadvantages of giving
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little
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 for
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activities
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 as a monotone and unhealthy lifestyle. People without any hobbies have a boring life. They usually go
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work
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to work
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 and come back home in the evening and they do not even realize that
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 their life is all about their
work
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, doctors or police officers mostly spend their
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 at
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 and sometimes they
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 overtime and do not even think about hobbies and sooner or later they will realize that their life is not interesting.
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, human beings sometimes have to consider that, working too much can affect their health. Jogging, fishing, hunting or walking can make them
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healthier
 and happier too. In conclusion, giving less
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leisure
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activities
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 has some advantages
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earnings
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 and becoming a more qualified worker. But it
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 has major disadvantages
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 as boring and unhealthy
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lifestyles
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. In my opinion, humans should pay more attention to their free
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 and do some
hobby related
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hobby-related
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activities
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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