In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very impotant for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

some people around the world
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that, having
home
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or an Apartment is much
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better than renting
ones
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. I reckon that
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owning
accomodation
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accommodation
plays a crucial role in humans life
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because
benefits
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the benefits
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outweigh
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the drawbacks
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. I
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bring
some
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reasons
in
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paragraph.
First
and foremost, they do not have any anxiety bout monthly
rents
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,
thus
is it
possiable
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possible
for them to save money as much as they can and are more capable to meet primary and secondary easily, they will not
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tenssions
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tensions
tension
and challenges about being homeless and will have more satisfaction.
Moreover
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homeowners make
profit
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a profit
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by having property, as owning
home
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a home
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is
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a kind
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of investment with less risk.
For instance
,
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statistic in 2022 have shown, almost 60%
Eroupean
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European
and Iranian population have bought flat in Turkey
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since
aproaching
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approaching
hame
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home
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the
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Turkey is a
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resealable
reasonable
deal and have
high
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profit.
Besides
,homeowners probably feel more confident and
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in their flats, because they are free to make
decision
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decisions
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wheneven
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whenever
they wish,
for example
, if
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apartemant
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apartment
need some repair there is no need to get permission
someonesle
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someones
. so
the
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redesigne
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redesign
redesigned
and renew own their home. In
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conclusion
, having
house
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a house
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not only
brigns
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brings
calm and welfare for
heuman
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human
beings, but
also
people will make
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a profit
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from it for their future.
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