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how many people visited four different international museums (Lourve,Vatican, London Science, Shenzhen) from 1980 to 2015

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This
 graph illustrates how many people visited four different international museums (Lourve,Vatican,
London
Science
, Shenzhen) from 1980 to 2015. The number of visitors is counted in millions. All three museums except
London
Science
Museum
 had an increase in the number of visitors since 1980 whereas
London
Science
Museum
 had a gradual decline since 1980. The majority of the crowd has chosen the Vatican
museum
 as their place of visit as seen by its continuous rise since 1988. Around four million visitors paid a visit to
London
Science
Museum
 during the 1980-1985 period but it took a hit until 1990 and eventually decreased dramatically by 2015. The Shenzhen
museum
 had a little less than 4 million people visiting,
however
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 it kept plummeting until 2000 and spiked slowly until 2015. The Louvre
museum
 had multiple fluctuations over time where it had a peak in 1990, stabilized over the
next
 05 years and fell slightly by 2000. Overall, all four museums have had multiple variations and the most prominent was the spike in the Vatican
museum
.
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