IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4

in some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. why might this be the case? do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

#countries #home #people #be #case #situation
it is argued by citizens in some countries that it is more necessary to own a property rather
instead
 of having rented accommodation due to several reasons which I completely agree with.
to begin
 with, in some countries a home is considered
as
Change preposition
apply
show examples
an investment if the inflation rate is higher than the interest rate which makes buying a house more profitable than having their money at the bank or investing in other sorts of activities. for ,instance people in Iran invest in assets
such
 as cars and houses so they can double their money just by waiting for prices to increase.
on the other hand
, some people take mortgage loans in order to get on the property ladder since they believe that it would be easier to pay their debts to the bank
instead
 of devoting a large proportion of their income to accommodation rent for the rest of their lives. in ,
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
conclusion I would say that in some circumstances the benefits of buying a home outweigh renting it since the property could be considered an investment or the mortgage can be played in a short amount of time.
Submitted by mahla.mirzaei on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
What to do next:
Look at other essays: