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In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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In
this
 era, the business community use a variety of advertising methods to sell their
products
, and
also
 one of them is that companies give a false impression, that their
products
 are new, to the consumers. Most individuals attract to new and unknown
goods
,
therefore
 they are willing to try that
product
. Because of
this
, the community explain their
products
 as new to the customers to get their attention to their
goods
.
For example
, if a
company
 make candy which has an unknown taste and attractive appearance, and is new to the industry, people will want to buy it even if the taste of
this
 candy is unpleasant.
On the other hand
,
this
 way of advertising
products
 is useful for the
company
, because the profit from the
goods
 will rise dramatically during the period that the advertising video or poster is realised.
However
, there will be many disappointing cases in that people are deceived by advertisements which means the
product
 that people buy is not a brand new
product
 and the quality is not enough to utilize it properly. Because of these issues, the belief of the population in the
company
 will decline more than before, and
then
 the
company
's activation will down. To sum up, most of the business communities use the way of advertising their
product
 as new is just temporary useful for them.
Therefore
, the
product
's quality is more important than the appearance of the
goods
.
Thus
, I believe that
this
 is definitely a negative development.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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