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Many schools these days have problems with poor student behavior. Why do you think these problems occur? what could be done to tackle these problems

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A generation ago, parents teach their
children
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 that
behaviour
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 can show anyone's identity either good or bad.
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. Teachers are facing some difficulties with the
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students
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behaviour
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.
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 essay will look at the core reasons for
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 and propose some solid solutions. one of the main causes of the problem is society's bad influences. By
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 I mean,
students
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 who come from a bad culture don't develop their way of language skills.
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, Bad societies have bad
children
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 that affect are getting normal
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. The solution is for
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 institutions need to give proper attention to those
students
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 that are not good morality. Another problem is that parents are mostly ignorant, they talked often with their
children
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 roughly and use bad language.
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 is to say
children
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 are not taking the value of
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. To tackle
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 issue, guardians have to behave their infants with nicely and give the importance of good culture. A
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 cause of the obstacle is that schools are sometimes ignored by the least
students
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 who belong to poor families. To be more precise, bad
behaviour
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students
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 are taken low attention from their teachers.
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, they don't receive the basic and important knowledge about being a good citizen. The way forward could be to make awareness about good manners and give equal rights to poor
students
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 with nicely. To sum up, difficulties can come up in the classroom for the bad spoken
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, due to the above reasons. My view is that the main responsibility for solving the problem lies with the parents and teachers.
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