Although more and more people read news on the Internet, newspaper will remain the most important source of news. Do you agree or disagree?

In
this
modern globalized world, technology is keeping develop and it
also
help
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to spread
news
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on
internet
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.
Additionally
, the past
last
years have seen a dramatic decrease
the
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importance of
newspapers
. I absolutely disagree to replace
internet
news
with
newspapers
because it would be unwise.
To begin
with, there are several benefits of
internet
news
.
Firstly
, it helps to save
time
because buying
newspapers
can take one's
time
and
also
means extra money. Currently, anyone can read online
news
via their telephones or computers. Another point is that the process of
newspapers
namely finding
news
and printing
also
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far more
time
however
online reports will provide an up to date information in
a
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seconds.
In addition
,
newspapers
also
have
bad
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affect
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to
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our ecology and lead to some kind of pollution because
in
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fact, the newspaper process requires
papers
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paper
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.
Firstly
, papers
take
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from trees and that
mean
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it will be
huge
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crisis for humanity.
Furthermore
, after reading
newspaper
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the newspaper
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,
people
throws
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away it into
garbage
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and it will go to recycling that
mean
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, publishing
newspapers
comprised of several steps to compare online
news
.
On the other hand
, there are still exist
such
kind
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of
people
who read
daily
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news
from
newspapers
and especially they are
aged
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group of
people
. One of the
reason
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behind
this
is they are inappropriate to use online platforms. Nothing compares to
news
on
internet
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yet in a sense, the
people
who read
newspapers
are not concerned about their health because of the
badly
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effects of smartphones or
computer's
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screens which hardly ever result in serious health
problem
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. From my personal point of view,
read
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news
from digital platforms can be good for one's
time
and finance.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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