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Most people are not interested in how their food has been produced. They only care about how much it costs. How true is this statement? What influences people when they buy food?

#people #food #care #costs #influences
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health issue is an important matter for society and
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 remarkable part is related to
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. I totally disagree with the given statement, believing that
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people
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 more aware in comparison with the past. While
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 just fewer
people
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 in poor countries in terms of economy consider the amount of money
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food
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 of quality and materials.
This
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 gives information about some factors which affect
people
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 to purchasing. Regarding
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in
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 health programs and international awareness about it,
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people
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 take care
what
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of what
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 they eat and drink.
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, they pay
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 money for
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healthy
food
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.
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people
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 can not afford to prepare their requirements have
forced
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to
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them to
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 consume cheap
food
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.
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, they are deprived of healthy nourishment.
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food
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.
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, they suffer from various kinds of diseases. In general, we can mention some bold factors which impact buyers and tend them to
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purchase
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food
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appearance has the most effect.
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of
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 the
parents
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,parents
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 the children prefer good-looking
food
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.
Moreover
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, the quality of
food
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 and
also
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 usage of materials are effective factors.
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, for some
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people
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,people
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 the charge of
food
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 has a noticeable influence
to
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on
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 choosing the best
food
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. To sum up, according to the efforts of
health
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 organs to rising awareness of
generation
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the generation
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,
people
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 try to consume healthy
food
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instead
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 of
cheap
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a cheap
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 one.
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, expect cost and initial materials of
food
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, its appearance is
influent
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an influent
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 subject.
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