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Some people think that teenagers should follow what the old people say whereas some believe that it is good for teenage people to challenge what old people say.

Mostly elders have got through a great variety of diverse happenings from the perspective of decades of their lifetimes. It has been acquired from overcoming misfortunes and any sort of things alike happened along the way. It is clear that hands-on
experience
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 shapes a worldview.
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, sometimes it doesn’t have a semblance with the reality
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 younger generations may be
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 into. So, it should be used wisely, with respect to
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circumstances
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a
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feedback. Apparently, typical situations are awaiting
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teenagers on every corner. Youngsters struggle
occasionaly
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occasionally
 with interacting with contemporaries or adults. All
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 pallete of emotions is well-known to adults. Falling couples apart are reference examples. They cause
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great damage to
self-esteem
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the self-esteem
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,
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 or composure of a teenager, which affects severely
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a
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their’s performance in daily life activities. A wise
adult
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adults
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 can provide an example of their own and explain how they overcome their sufferings which should bring them on the same foot.
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 should help an adult to acquire a teen’s attention and guide them in the right direction,
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 as
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let
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 the past relationship go and keep looking forward,
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and do
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the
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a
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the
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 right move to restore them.
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, a particular period of time makes its own adjustments
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a
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the
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 perception of reality
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an adolescent.
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imply
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implies
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 that
wisdom
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the wisdom
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 and
experience
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 of an aged person could not be applied
straighforward
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straight forward
. Previously, obedience and modesty were highly valued in young people as a sign of reliability, whereas a teen of the present
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 must be proactive and determined,
show
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and show
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 their intelligence and commitment in order to be noticed by others.
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 helps them to build a brighter future for themselves by doing so which can be quite far from understanding by some elders. In my opinion, the
experience
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 has its own value at a particular period of time. Older generations should not encourage teens to rely on their wisdom without any back thought.
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,
wisdom
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the wisdom
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 of an adult should be challenged by teens in order to stay relevant and helpful. So, I
belief
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believe
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 that
experience
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 is relevant
by
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to
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 challenging
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other teenagers.

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