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Popular events like the football world cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in safe way

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It is quite clear that sports build unity among people. In
this
 essay, I will discuss how international sporting events like the Football
world
 cup which has won the hearts of millions across the globe, help in building better international connections, reducing tensions and providing a safer release of patriotic feelings. Sports unify communities and influence countries to do better.
For example
, the Australian cricketers who came for a tournament in
Sri
 Lanka were surprised by the warm welcome and the great hospitality they received during their match. The Lankans wore T-shirts with “team Australia” embarked on them. According to them,
such
 nice gestures were rarely witnessed during their prior matches.
Then
,
as a result
, the whole team decided to help
Sri
 Lanka by influencing people around the globe to visit
Sri
 Lanka which collected a massive amount of revenue for their economy.
This
 has helped the
Sri
 Lankan economy to become financially upgraded. What divides the
world
 could be bought closer just by one sporting event. The recent Football
World
 Cup is the best example as many visited Qatar during
this
 time.
This
 resulted in Qatar becoming one of the greatest attractions in the
world
. The spectators cheered during good times and wept together during bad times. They hold their hands as a symbol of unity among countries.
On the contrary
, with large-scale sporting
events
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 the possibility of racism, unfair treatment, illegal gaming methods and bias towards their own country are quite common. So,
this
 greatly encourages division among communities and causes tension between them and their countries. In my point of view, the need for famous sporting events is not necessary to build friendships and unite the
world
 as there are various other methods we can do to achieve
such
 unity.
However
, if we are able to omit the drawbacks as mentioned before it will be beneficial. RUN PREMIUM CHECKER
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