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In some countries are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message

#countries #children #message
It is often said that hard
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 to gain everything that we need is possible
by
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 people in several countries.
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children
 trust their adults.
Therefore
 they
bel
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be
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 hard
working
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 is a must to achieve their future ambitions. There are many advantages and disadvantages of thinking in
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manner
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. In
following
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essay
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 I am going to state some pros and cons of hard
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First
 of all ,
children
 will realize it is not easy to gain better life without
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 hard if they learn
true
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 stories of famous people who gain success with many difficulties. And
also
 hard work
build
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 a person who can bear any situation regardless of good or bad. What I mean is
children
 can learn how to deal with certain emotions (happy or sad).
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Furthermore
,personal satisfaction is
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a very
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 important thing that can achieve when we become successful people.It is
precious
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a precious
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 gift of hard
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. To summarise,As
advantages
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the advantages
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 of hard
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 always overweigh by disadvantages we should encourage our
children
regarding
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how to work hard .
In addition
 to that we have to pay attention
how
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 they behave and give
relavant
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relevant
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 when necessary. .
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