In the modern world, more and more emphasis is being placed on the acquisition of practical skills rather than knowledge from text books or other sources. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

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aspect, the more working related

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aspect, they could save a lot of time and money in teaching new employers.

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in computer science who learned coding

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experience in development would have an advantage in the job market.

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security industry which means the person only

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how to execute the script but

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know the details of the vulnerability which makes no

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more time on learning

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