In the modern world, more and more emphasis is being placed on the acquisition of practical skills rather than knowledge from text books or other sources. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

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experience is becoming more important than
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knowledge
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practical
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aspect, the more working related
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students practice, the easier they would get
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employed
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. And for
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aspect, they could save a lot of time and money in teaching new employers.
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, a lot of software companies' job descriptions said they want to their applicants have related experience, so that students
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in computer science who learned coding
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and have
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experience in development would have an advantage in the job market.
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, lack of thesis
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some negative aspects.
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innovation and hard to make progress
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since people are more willing to learn how to use the
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than the base of the
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. Like there is a phase "script kiddle" in
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security industry which means the person only
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how to execute the script but
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know the details of the vulnerability which makes no
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improvement
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insure
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. In conclusion, there are both
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people
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more time on learning
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than thesis
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from books.
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