Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In our media-dominated era , most companies, in order to increase their margin, and to make a profit, advertisement has become their main tool. Some think it’s really helpful to make
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to purchase things, some say advertising is boring , it no longer brings enjoyment. I would agree that
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ad is the most important factor
to buy
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in buying
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some of our essential items. Almost every company’s marketing consists of advertisements,
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offering special prices to the customer. In my opinion, fancy clips and good visualized advertisement really catches my eye in a matter of seconds, I would be thinking about buying these products, even though it’s not really needed.
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, in the morning if I watch a really good commercial about a new restaurant in town, I
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want to eat my lunch there,
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means the commercial reached its main purpose.
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, some of the advertisements have become dull and we no longer pay attention to it.
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a long working day, family members gather in front of the TV to watch their favourite program, but suddenly some shiny clips
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to show and some familiar celebrity will be using that new skin product and she would say, use
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product if you want to look fancy like me.
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kind of advertisements, that
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essay mentioned above, will bore the customers,
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they will be annoyed. Their favourite TV program is cut short because some
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companies have
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established a new product that might be the same as their old ones. In summary,
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is becoming so common,
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that some
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are affected
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by it’s
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it’s
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effects and buy things,
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and some
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say the
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of
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campaign
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is uninteresting. The right visual will
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our attention immediately, in spite of its length of cutting short of our everyday TV programme. I would argue that a commercial is very helpful to choose between two similar items and to
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the right choice.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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