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In contemporary society, everyone should have equal opportunities in education. Therefore, universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#society #opportunities #education #universities #numbers #students
I concur that everyone should have equal access to educational opportunities in a just society. I disagree,
however
, that every topic at universities should accept an equal proportion of male and female students. Admissions choices ought to be made on the basis of merit and credentials rather than gender. The integrity of the admissions process can be harmed by accepting students based on quotas or fixed numbers, and it's possible that the best and brightest applicants won't be accepted.
Furthermore
, it's critical to acknowledge that some professions can have a smaller proportion of female applicants, making it unlikely or inappropriate to mandate equal gender representation in these industries. It is
also
 important to recognize that some fields may have a lower percentage of female applicants.
This
 could be due to a variety of factors,
such
 as societal biases and stereotypes, lack of exposure to or encouragement in certain fields, or lack of role models and mentors. Mandating equal gender representation in these fields may not be feasible or appropriate, and
instead
, efforts should be made to address the underlying factors that contribute to the imbalance in representation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Equal opportunities
  • Gender equality
  • Stereotypes
  • Diverse
  • Gender disparity
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, and Mathematics)
  • Humanities
  • Quotas
  • Reverse discrimination
  • Meritocracy
  • Tokenism
  • Workforce
  • Leadership roles
  • Aptitude-based
  • Scholarships
  • Economic growth
  • Innovation
  • Social stability
  • Comparative analysis
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