Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion

It is true that the question of whether to study at

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or get a job straight after

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remains a source of controversy in the education field. While a number of people believe that working after graduating high

school

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is better, I would argue that studying

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higher education is one of the best routes to a successful career. On the one hand, getting a job right after

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high

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is a good option.

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, not many students have an opportunity to

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in

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university

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or college, so

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some of them decide to start their career paths straight after

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in order to earn income for their personal life.

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, many young students are made to work

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of going to

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, because their parents assume that going to

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is so costly and

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. In fact, students can earn more money to support

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finance when working at factories or industrial areas.

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, I believe that studying at

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or college is the best route to improve our life quality, not only

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career path. One of the most essential reasons for pursuing higher education is to get a qualified degree. A

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or

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degree from form

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is

a good evidence

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to demonstrate that we have enough

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knowledge

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, capacity and academic experience to get a position with a high salary. Another reason is that we can broaden our

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when studying at

university

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. By participating in clubs or student organizations, we are able to meet new friends,

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and making

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a connection

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with people we want to collaborate with and develop together. In conclusion,

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both views certainly have some validity, it seems to me that it is better to continue the academic journey at

university

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or college. I believe that we can have a better future

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our

bachelor

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degree.