The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. To what extent do you agree?

I agree with the statement that in
the
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recent
times
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more and more
people
are having more than
one
job
.
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on
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how
people
are moving away from
single
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the single
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job
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jobs
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and
then
discuss how
people
are moving to
creating
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multiple income sources.
Now a days
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most
people
wanted
flexibilty
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flexibility
on
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how they want to work and spend their time and not fixed to
one
ful-time
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full-time
job
.
People
are able to manage it by doing
one
ful-time
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full-time
job
and
one
or more
partime
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part-time
jobs
or sometimes
completly
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completely
not having
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fulltime
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full-time
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job
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jobs
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and relying only on part-time
jobs
which are flexible to their
timmings
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timings
trimmings
. In the olden
days
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people
are like have
one
job
day-in
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day in
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and
day-out
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from morning to night and climb the corporate ladder
get
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increments and promotions, but that seemed to
faded
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away now.
Moreover
, with the advent of
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internet
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it had become very easy to educate oneself with more and more
ways
to earn income. Some of the
ways
were
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investing in
stock
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market and getting regular dividends on their investment, another popular way is buying real estate properties for rental incomes. While these are
most
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popular
ways
everybody may not have enough capital to do
this
so they do multiple
partime
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part-time
jobs
to earn extra bucks which
gives
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allows
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them to work whenever they are needed to. In
conclusion
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we have seen how
people
are moving from
single
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job
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jobs
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to multiple
jobs
and educating themselves to find various
ways
to earn money.
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