The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. To what extent do you agree?

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I agree with the statement that in
the
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apply

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recent
times
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,times

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more and more
people
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are having more than
one
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job
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.
First
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I shall discuss
on
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how
people
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are moving away from
single
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the single
a single

The noun phrase single job seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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job
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jobs

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and
then
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discuss how
people
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are moving to
creating
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create

The to-infinitive that follows the verb moving requires the base form. Change creating to the base form.

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multiple income sources.
Now a days
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Nowadays

The compound Now a days appears to be incorrect. Consider changing it to the closed compound nowadays.

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most
people
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wanted
flexibilty
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flexibility

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on
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in

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how they want to work and spend their time and not fixed to
one
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ful-time
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full-time

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job
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.
People
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are able to manage it by doing
one
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ful-time
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full-time

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job
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and
one
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or more
partime
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part-time

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jobs
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or sometimes
completly
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completely

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not having
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a fulltime
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fulltime
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full-time

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job
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jobs

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and relying only on part-time
jobs
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which are flexible to their
timmings
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timings
trimmings

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. In the olden
days
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,days

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people
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are like have
one
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job
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day-in
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day in

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and
day-out
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day out

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from morning to night and climb the corporate ladder
get
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to get

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increments and promotions, but that seemed to
faded
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fade

It appears that the verb faded should be in the base form as part of the to-infinitive following seemed. Consider changing the verb form.

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away now.
Moreover
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, with the advent of
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the internet
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internet
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,internet

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it had become very easy to educate oneself with more and more
ways
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to earn income. Some of the
ways
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were
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we're

The word were doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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investing in
stock
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the stock

The noun phrase stock market seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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market and getting regular dividends on their investment, another popular way is buying real estate properties for rental incomes. While these are
most
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the most

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popular
ways
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everybody may not have enough capital to do
this
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so they do multiple
partime
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part-time

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jobs
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to earn extra bucks which
gives
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give

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allows
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allow

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them to work whenever they are needed to. In
conclusion
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,conclusion

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we have seen how
people
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are moving from
single
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a single

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job
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jobs

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to multiple
jobs
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and educating themselves to find various
ways
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to earn money.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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