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crime is increasing. what are the reasons and how we can overcome them?

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The growth rate of crime is increasing by leaps and bounds because of
environment
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, organizations, and, unemployment and various reasons stand behind
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. In my, opinion the position of crime appears to be more rational. In
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of
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 trend and
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 will lead to a logical conclusion. There are myriads of reasons which
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 explain these arguments but the most preponderant fact is new environment is the main reason due to technologies
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 as online money
frauds
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, stealing money from
ATM
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, Online honour killing, and, bank fraud. Another pivotal aspect is the population is fascinated by crimes owing to it is increased popularity and fame across the world.
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, most youngsters are unemployed and they are demotivated by leaders and attempt crimes.
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, drugs and alcohol
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role
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, a survey conducted by the prestigious university of Oxford in London revealed that the population learn crime from movies and documentary. For, example the article published in the eminent newspaper Hindustan Times depicts that most offenders claim that they are influenced by cinema.
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, there
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 various
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 to combat
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dillemma
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 and which can certainly overwhelm the potential influence of
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, the most alarming one is
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 laws applied by the government.
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, the higher authorities should start
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 scheme which is provided rewards and gift
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person who
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police
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 and stop offenders immediately.
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, police take challenging action against criminals.
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, the report published by NASA REPRESENT the fact that Arab countries
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 UAE, Dubai, and, Saudi use the internet reducing crimes in the region. For, instance spy
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, wifi, and, artificial intelligence. To sum up, according to the argument aforementioned above one can reach the conclusion that, these quick fixes can find an adequate solution
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crime rate
  • recidivism
  • rehabilitation
  • law enforcement
  • social inequality
  • unemployment
  • urbanization
  • community policing
  • offenders
  • recidivism rates
  • preventing crime
  • economic costs
  • technology in crime
  • government policies
  • social media influence
  • education and crime
  • fear in communities
  • disruption of community life
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