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Nowadays, an increasing number of people with health problems are using alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their normal doctor. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

#people #health #alternative #medicines #treatments #doctor #development
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present
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 time,
number
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 of health issues have been increased among citizens and in order to deal with that they are using other substitutes
of
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medicines
 and treatment rather than visiting
to
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their
doctor
. I believe that
this
 is a negative development because other methods could lead to various
side-effects
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side effects
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.
First
 of all, there is no doubt that there are various
alternate
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 available to curb illness
such
 as ayurvedic
medicines
 and
also
home-made
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homemade
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 remedies.
In other words
, due to
advancement
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 in
homopathy
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homoeopathy
, people prefer taking these
medicines
 which
is
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 come from plants, animals and minerals because it is believed that these are not only
most
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 effective to cure any disease but
also
 available
in
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very
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 less cost.
Besides
, ayurvedic treatment
is become
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 popular as it purifies the internal body,
folllowed
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followed
 by a special diet, yoga and meditation, people cure their problems with
this
.
On the other hand
, if individuals could not visiting
to
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hospitals, their condition might become more severe. To elaborate, it is undeniable that only a
doctor
 knows the exact illness of a
people
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person
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, and
also
 the best treatment to cure that disease.
Therefore
, if one's can follow
doctor's
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intructions
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instructions
,
they
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 would easily overcome
with
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heatlh
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health
 problems.
Moreover
,
doctor's
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 recommendation is essential before taking any
precaution
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 as many
medicines
 have serious
side-effects
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side effects
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 which
leads
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 to
put
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human's
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 life in danger. In conclusion, I believe that adopting other methods
such
 as ayurvedic would not
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a
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 right option and consultation
of
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doctor
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 is
crutial
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crucial
critical
 because it has
serious
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 impact on mankind.
This
 essay believes that it is a negative development.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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